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Flowetic
27.07.2006, 13:51
Lueget euch text mal a und säged was er derfo haltet, was er wördet besser mache, welli part guet sind und so wiiter...es gat eifach mal ums textliche oder reimtechnik, flow chammer ja nonig beurteile. wär au no guet wenns da englischsprechendi git wo au no chönd rat ge...
but keep in mind dass die text nonig fertig sind und nur so e art entwurf, ich will nur wüsse ob die richtig won ich ischla die richtig isch. Merci

Text 1:
Let the Homicides begin like Percee P
watch me flow to the beat so perfectly
like it’s supposed to be, vote for me
want dope? go with me
cuz I can give you a flash like only crack can
when I’m crackin’ rhymes packin’ em into small spaces
all aces, stackin’ bodies when I’m rappin
adrenaline like car chases, haul assin’ like car races
I’m first placed and flowin’ and showin’ how to get the crowd going
I’m throwin flames like a flamethrower
don’t play games cuz it’s game over
I came sober to shake and take over this spot like a land rover
with a flow so liquid it’s drippin’ and hittin’ to the beat, that Ima stick with
it’s that sick shit, bubblin’ and mind-bogglin’ like a lyrical muggin’
I’m comin, bombin’ the set like a veteran
sweatin like I’m pedaling but I ain’t settlin’ yet
Correct like a teacher with the pen in my hand
want me comin 2 ur show it’s ten grants in advance sir
sick like cancer, attackin like a lancer
I’m dribblin’ and hittin’ buzz shots like the answer
...

Flowetic
27.07.2006, 13:54
da no chli battle shit:

Uh, wherever I go, wherever I be
Haterz always follow me
they can’t let it be, can’t let it go yo
They won’t see that it is impossible to cop my flow
rock a show – like I do
stop-n-go!
can not blow the speakers
heat up the crowd like heaters
I set the stage on fire
while they be crawling on the ground I go higher
it’s that flow fire that makes kids wanna retire
you better go hire some veterans that cover you
while I’m runnin thru’ ur funny crew
I’m stunnin you, steady makin fun of you
y’all ain’t ready I flow steady
with rhymes sharper than a machete
shatterin you into a thousand pieces like confetti
but still I keep it clean
leave no remains but bloodstains, I’m keen
it’s unseen and unheard of
right now it’s nothing but a gleam at the horizon
I steam like a rocket as it flies in
analyzin’ the enemy while I’m slowly risin’
like the sun
you see my squad come in the place you better run
ur askin for a last wish but I can’t grant you one
your gonna be done – finito
when me and my amigos let the heat blow
one advise: duck down – be low
cuz I’ll be strikin’ MC’s from the top and below
left and right
but I’m out of sight quick cuz I come and hit then run
one attack is all that it takes
to leave you suckers in a bandage
from head to toe your gold vanished
Ima banish you fools
precise flow integrated into a nice show be my tools
plus my rhymetechnique gives me the right to come up with my own rules
Flow’etic be the Name stuck in your brain son
you know a better rapper than me? Name one!
I came from Baden, Switzerland to shake this spot
and you were playin paper, rock, -
scissors, I took the throne with metaphysical powers like wizards
hit you with a lyrical blizzard
...

perplex
27.07.2006, 15:32
ich dänkä vill vo dem text isch rächt guät zum fett flowä...vo dem her findis ä guäti sach, also reimtechnisch gseh. wasi nöd so beidruckend find isch dä inhalt...findi rächt standard um nöd zsägä inhaltlos. isch halt eifach das üblichä "yo, ich bin dä burner" textli. aber ebä är wür sichär geil tönä über än freshä, funkigä, chli schnällärä beat, halt so das augämärk nöd ufäm inhalt liit.
villfach häsch au so chli reims bracht woni scho us amiträcks zu genüge kännä wiä z.b. flamethrower-game over und bogglin'-bubblin'-hittin'-drippin' oder wizard-blizard und rule-fool-tool...abär ich weiss uf änglish häsch wahrschinli au nöd sonän riisä wortschatz und ebä d amis bringäd ja au oft relativ oft ghörti reims wo rächt simple sind.
susch no äs detail woni grad gseh han: chamer das sägä?
want dope? go with me müässts nöd heissä come with me?

Wenns einä vo dinä erschtä text uf änglisch isch, dänn muässi sägä isch ächt guät.
Woher chasch änglisch?

Flowetic
27.07.2006, 21:22
Als erschts messi förs feedback. weiss scho dasses inhaltlich au nöd grads gelbe vom ei isch aber wie du gseit hesch han de text zumene schnelle, funky beat gschribe und die eignet sich halt ned so för storrytelling. "Go with me" han ich gmeint im sinn vo z.B. "I'm going with XY's opinion" aber stimmt scho isch zweidütig.
Han ehrlich gseit au nöd fescht uf de text g'achtet sundern augemerk uf de flow gleit
....
aber s'folgt gli echli en deepere text!
Sowiit merci
:hippie:

Flowetic
27.07.2006, 21:26
öbrigens die wo schlecht gvoted händ chönd ers au no begründe? So hilfts mer ned vill...

Flowetic
27.07.2006, 21:34
Da no en text wo ich scho mal im forum posted han, zwar au numme o815 baddle shit aber isch au usem battle forum
also, feedback erwünscht:

I eat wannabee's like you for breakfast if I have to/
smash you, mash you, blast you with my verbal glock to bash you/
leave you in a cast 2, cuz my skills improve radical/
proved to be tactical, u better bring a perfectly planned out plan/
or u might get canned, clouted or end up in my pan /
like the last competitor who claimed to be my biggest fan/
This and much more can happen/
from fist fights to guns clappin'/
Yo I have fun rappin, I'm done scrapping easy targets you represent/
winnin by huge margins when I rap with sense/
leavin' dents in the speakers cuz I spit heavy material/
I'm Ill like fever but the infection ain't bacterial/
tasty like cereals, when I set a foot on the stage the crowd be acting hysterical/
cuz they know my lyrical -
ability to play with alphabetical letters/
I be the poetical trendsetter/
Flow'etic be the name stuck in ur brain/
lettin them rhymes drop on you like rain/
yo I don't need chains in all lengts/
with every rhyme Ima gain strength/
explain plans that'll make your world turn upside down/
It's hard to get your mind straight when your upside's down/
I claim the crown, I cripple your crew/
but don't think you'll get away cuz I'll be hittin you too/
I Flow like diarrhea with which I'll be shittin you fools....:p

ched
30.07.2006, 11:02
Original geschrieben von Flowetic


Text 1:
Let the Homicides begin like Percee P
watch me flow to the beat so perfectly
like it’s supposed to be, vote for me
want dope? go with me
cuz I can give you a flash like only crack can
when I’m crackin’ rhymes packin’ em into small spaces
all aces, stackin’ bodies when I’m rappin
adrenaline like car chases, haul assin’ like car races
I’m first placed and flowin’ and showin’ how to get the crowd going
I’m throwin flames like a flamethrower
don’t play games cuz it’s game over
I came sober to shake and take over this spot like a land rover
with a flow so liquid it’s drippin’ and hittin’ to the beat, that Ima stick with
it’s that sick shit, bubblin’ and mind-bogglin’ like a lyrical muggin’
I’m comin, bombin’ the set like a veteran
sweatin like I’m pedaling but I ain’t settlin’ yet
Correct like a teacher with the pen in my hand
want me comin 2 ur show it’s ten grants in advance sir
sick like cancer, attackin like a lancer
I’m dribblin’ and hittin’ buzz shots like the answer
...

aso i denk mol dä lot sich herrlich flowe.. ischmr so bim lese ufgfalle.. isch huere ring gange.. zum represente sicher no geile shit ;)

strangek
31.07.2006, 10:43
he alde ich find dine englisch-shit eifach zum duredrehe isch so abartig geil...respekt mach wiiter so alde!!piiis

Avenger
31.07.2006, 11:16
nöd übel, wär no cool wenn mal kein battle-text sondern öpis mit inhalt schriebe würsch

im erste text stört mich vor allem "I'm like this, I'm like that" das chund eifach zu oft, chli chamäleon style :D

Flowetic
31.07.2006, 12:03
Merci förs feedback lüüt. Bin au grad amene storytelling text dra, da mal öbbis woni im freestyle postet han, mal was anders als baddleshit...;)


Damn gurl you dont know how much I'm missin you
just sittin around cuz I ain't got no shit to do
is it fate or bad luck or the will of god
i don't know what it is but it still feels odd
to not having you by my side and nothing can change it
my world's colliding, who am I supposed to hang with?
Sometimes I don't understand shit, wish I could amend it
is it cuz my heart's talkin in another language?
So many questions on my mind and no answer in sight
love makes blind is it that what I'm feeling inside?
now I know what it's like, the veil is lifted
but wihtout u I'm still a misfit, I mean
ur so gifted and beautiful like no other I've seen
but the distance ripped us apart
and there's nothing that can fix my heart
this shit is hard to figure I mean we both breathe the same air
my words carried by the wind, from over here to over there through the atmoshpere
and maybe one day you too will hear my heart cry
before it's being ripped apart, doomed to die...


Love u gurl para siempre mi latina bonita
"te amo", de tu papi chulo a su mama sita

Slizz
06.08.2006, 12:47
Yo jeebeem
dope shit alte gfallt mer alles natürlich enhaltlich send di erschte paar ned wältbewegend aber ideal zom rappe mann... Fette :respect:
nemmsch de shiznit uuf? odar hesches vor?
hesch beatz oder en Producer?

Flowetic
20.08.2006, 20:08
Lönds eifach mal iwörke....Allfälligi nebewörkige bitte melde :D

Suckers on the streets need to get it straight
acting like the Gorilla-Unit but they ain't apes
getting peeled like grapes I seal their fate on mixtapes
wanna play games but they ain't cool like james
I rule when I aim they get fooled when they swallow my drool
i ain't no phony i'm spittin the truth
and if u oppose u gettin hit by my boots I suppose
burned by metaphysical flames didn't ur momma teach u to not play with the fire?
U's a liar I scare u away with news that is dire u be mired
my entire brain is wired up with the mic and the box, leave u spinnin like a car tire
gettin tired? I still rock, my voice contains the power of a choir
I acquire everything I desire call me sire from now on
my rhymes is revolutionary like nylon
when I appear on the scene u self-claimed gangstas need a shoulder to cry on
this is my song
ur mind's blown, "Now Y'all Phucked!" like KRS-One
u stay under arrest son let me test my gun
maximum stun when u get hit by my expressions
showin aggression, verball assassin really IS a profession
Y'all kiddies checkin out skinnies in minis wihtout discretion
ur eyes pop when they're flashin' their titties I show no pity I be harassin
those kiddies untill they're confessin
my rhymestyle's messin them up
the be like "what the fuck??!" and that's when the lightning struck
hit 'em by surprise and all the sudden they act all nice when their life demises
it's a fact the mic's a mighty device when hold by the right hand
the pen's mightier than the sword I expand my words with the herds I command
it's all planned i got more metaphors than a beach got sand I preach and stand
strong like a Big Tree in a windstorm
I been gone before but I came back to rap one more - time, I rhyme till there's no more sunshine, blow up the spot like a landmine
this one was for all the wannabees that act all tough but when it goes down they run like DMC and they're dissin ME??
Bitch Please! U gots to be kidding
and if not I just keep on spitting......

strangek
23.08.2006, 12:30
Original geschrieben von Flowetic
Lönds eifach mal iwörke....Allfälligi nebewörkige bitte melde :D

Suckers on the streets need to get it straight
acting like the Gorilla-Unit but they ain't apes
getting peeled like grapes I seal their fate on mixtapes
wanna play games but they ain't cool like james
I rule when I aim they get fooled when they swallow my drool
i ain't no phony i'm spittin the truth
and if u oppose u gettin hit by my boots I suppose
burned by metaphysical flames didn't ur momma teach u to not play with the fire?
U's a liar I scare u away with news that is dire u be mired
my entire brain is wired up with the mic and the box, leave u spinnin like a car tire
gettin tired? I still rock, my voice contains the power of a choir
I acquire everything I desire call me sire from now on
my rhymes is revolutionary like nylon
when I appear on the scene u self-claimed gangstas need a shoulder to cry on
this is my song
ur mind's blown, "Now Y'all Phucked!" like KRS-One
u stay under arrest son let me test my gun
maximum stun when u get hit by my expressions
showin aggression, verball assassin really IS a profession
Y'all kiddies checkin out skinnies in minis wihtout discretion
ur eyes pop when they're flashin' their titties I show no pity I be harassin
those kiddies untill they're confessin
my rhymestyle's messin them up
the be like "what the fuck??!" and that's when the lightning struck
hit 'em by surprise and all the sudden they act all nice when their life demises
it's a fact the mic's a mighty device when hold by the right hand
the pen's mightier than the sword I expand my words with the herds I command
it's all planned i got more metaphors than a beach got sand I preach and stand
strong like a Big Tree in a windstorm
I been gone before but I came back to rap one more - time, I rhyme till there's no more sunshine, blow up the spot like a landmine
this one was for all the wannabees that act all tough but when it goes down they run like DMC and they're dissin ME??
Bitch Please! U gots to be kidding
and if not I just keep on spitting......

echt abartige respekt man...es flowt so dirty...und zum rappe echt voll fett...du chasch sege du chaschs uf englisch...next step...lets go...piis

Flowetic
24.08.2006, 14:19
Merci Leutz immer flissig wiiter schriibe. Und die wos scheisse findet au grad säge aber bitte ehrlichi kritik tnx
peace